Sen99

Dec 26, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the challenge:

12/24 My Advice To Younger Me

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Never Will I Marry

So never will I marry
any Tom, Dick or Harry
A simple lie I cannot tell
No sound of a wedding bell

When I think of the endless fun I’ve had
To marry would just make me mad
What’s with all that domestic bliss
Must be more to life than this
Making commitments and vows
In truth, I can’t be bothered now

Fidelity makes me feel a fake
Even a harem is too much to take
Too many wives to pamper and please
Can’t attend to all their needs
Why do I want a significant other
Best mistress is the wife of my brother
Stay single and accept my fate
I’ve met the most perfect cell mate

Remain happy, solvent, healthy and wise
Marriage is one long compromise
If you just want to live like me
Never succumb to holy matrimony

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nottinghamshire England, GBR

Comments

neopoet

6 months ago

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Jackweb

6 months ago

Here's my analysis -

_Theme:_
The poem explores the theme of marriage and relationships, with the speaker expressing their reluctance to commit to a romantic partnership.
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Jackweb

6 months ago

Overall, the poem is a

Overall, the poem is a humorous and lighthearted exploration of the speaker's reluctance to commit to marriage. Its playful tone and clever wordplay make it an enjoyable read.
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Sen99

6 months ago

Hello AI Poet

thanks for your immense critique of my poem, who needs an AI robot anyway, good job.

Rula

6 months ago

Hello Sen99

I'll take this as a humorous piece. I don't think that you meant every word there, and if you did, maybe you'll change this perspective about marriage, or have I missed your point?
Believe me, a descent woman can always make a difference, at least my point of view.
Much enjoyed
Thank you for sharing!

Sen99

6 months ago

Thank you Rula

As a confirmed bachelor it is meant in jest mainly at myself, glad you see the humour in it but I do think it is mostly true.

Lavender

6 months ago

Never Will I Marry

Hello, Sen,
A big grin, here! I like the tempo and language throughout. There is a bit of liveliness within this that keeps me from taking it too seriously. A very clever entry for the contest. (It may just be the time of year, but the pace and crusty vibe reminds me of something the Grinch would write. :)
Thank you!
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Sen99

6 months ago

Hey Lavendar

You read my mind, it is a parody of an old bachelor at Xmas like me writing to my young self, the Grinch has pretty good rhyming skills too so thanks for the comment and encouragement !

Lavender

6 months ago

The Grinch

has fantastic rhyming skills, as do you!
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Geezer

5 months 4 weeks ago

Fortunately...

I refused to give up on matrimony after two failed marriages, and I have had thirty some years, of a satisfactory partnership with the love of my life. However, I can understand the reluctance of some to bind themselves to another; there were times that I almost regretted my commitment. You have shown that marriage is not for everyone. Nice job,
~ Geez.
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Sen99

5 months 4 weeks ago

Well done on your .......

....... marital longevity but it is one long compromise and not for everyone, that is true.
Thanks for your commentary.