Candlewitch

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Nevermore (by: eddy styx) senryu string of five

Senryu String: Nevermore (by: eddy styx)

angelic face, love
ever my focus flower
dreaming in your arms

in awe cannot speak
my head full of your essence
precious beyond stars

inspired loving
gracing me in ecstasy
never another

fleetingly time flown
over many lives and moons
in death gone to sky

labor beyond love
hoping to capture her poise
angel hosts give voice

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

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Comments

Geezer

3 years ago

This is...

very well done! You have not missed a beat!

"in awe cannot speak
my head full of your presence
precious beyond stars"

Your love speaks for itself! She is such a lucky woman!
~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

3 years ago

hey Geezer,

thank you for reading and commenting. I have to admit, I learned a bit from (the) cat! have a grand day and night!

ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Dearest Sis

Wow this is magnificent, truly its beyond beautiful.

in awe cannot speak
my head full of your essence
precious beyond stars

That's just superb writing.

((((BRAVA)))) yes I yelled that lol

all my love Sis xox

Candlewitch

2 years 4 months ago

dear Sis,

you make me feel like a bard, and not just a poet, you are something incredible!

thank you for loving me! Sis

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

This was wonderful

Delicate, well written and you could feel the love in every line. Great job

Candlewitch

2 years 4 months ago

thank you, Carrie,

I love Senryu & haiku! but I more often find my voice in Senryu. I can't wait to read your next poem, no matter what the style!

*hugs, Cat