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Neverwas and Nevermore
Neverwas and nevermore
two places I have been,
the former taught me how to dream
where I'lll never go again.
Journey begins at twilight
through a time tunnel, secure
be careful, avoid the shadows
they cause aches one can't endure.
Neverwas and nevermore
two places I have been,
the latter highlights memories
I make with all my friends.
Out of time's windy tunnel
you'll spy a meadowy-like haze,
that separates the field of dreams
from the light and shadow maze.
Neverwas and nevermore
two places I have been,
the former taught me how to dream
where I'll never go again;
and when you breathe, your fears all leave
because the air's so blue,
it's sometimes difficult to see
if the meloncholy swallows you.
Neverwas and nevermore
two places I have been,
the latter highlights memories
I made with all my friends;
and with thier help, my life's been adorned
from some of the rarest fabric sewn;
imported only for my, warm existence
so for, forever; I'll not feel...so alone.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Typed in by my Mom/secretary as my computer is down.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Ian.T
13 years ago
Doc
A change from the Norm and was well received, just one small thing to bring balance to it there needs to be another Stanza at the end..
As to using a secretary to type for you can you send me one lol.
Have a great day out there yours, Typing himself, Ian.T
lonlyhrtsclub13
11 years 11 months ago
Two places
I have definitely been. Good write. I try to stay out of neverwas, it tends to get me in trouble if i overthink it. Nevermore is a place I frequent, the things that was and will never be again...
docmaverick
11 years 11 months ago
Thanx, Carrie....
...sometimes, I can actually find comfort in the estranged knowledge that, l will have to deal with those memories.......nevermore, ya know?
thanx, 4 reading....& the encouraging words;
sincerely,
doc. :}.