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A New Life

We thought that moving to a place

with springs, grass-field and butterflies

would make it better for us, but it was all vanity;

like in the city when we were complaining about overdue bills,

traffic, noise and lack of privacy,

we are now polluting this serene place

with our petty fights.

If it is possible to move to heaven right now,

I think God would kick us back to this blue ball……..

Honey, I think it’s time that we change our attitude

towards each other, and rekindle our passionate love,

rather than moving from one place to another.

Source: A New Life - Change Poems, Life Poems, True Love Poems http://www.poemsclub.com/a-new-life.html#ixzz2hrpyB4Aa

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Kenya, KEN

Favorite Poets: Alan Poe, Maya Angelou & Rumi

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Comments

mand

mand

11 years 11 months ago

I like the message and

I like the message and simplicity of this one!

Its honest, concise, clear and easy to understand - which is what is appealing about it.

Well done.

Love Mand xxx