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Mar 07, 2023
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A New Reality
Grow old with me
And we shall surely see
The birth of a new society
Where love is spoken first
Evolving into beings
Of purity and grace
Where fear and deceit no longer
Draw lines upon our faces
When goodness as a river
Perpetually now run through us
We will deliver wisdoms’ gifts
Learned from life’s steely lessons
Where we calmly sail as children
Upon the sea of eternity
And patiently we wait to see
The distant land of hopes and dreams
And dream at night of peaceful things
The prints of nails
in hands and feet
Let yours be our new reality!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I wrote these words thinking about my beliefs in what I believe the afterlife might look like.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Leslie
2 years 4 months ago
A new reality!
Thank you! you're very kind! I also hope for the same things. have a day ful of wonderful thoughts and feelings to express!