Nightscape

shadows slowly lengthen
disappearing gently
into silhouettes

one act follows another
in a harmonic motion

birds return to nests
to chirpy welcome of mates
snuggling together

moon takes center stage
for a romantic ballet

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

raj

4 years 11 months ago

Thanks Teddy

for taking time to read. Good to know you liked it and found it gorgeous.

thanks again...

c lynn brooks

4 years 11 months ago

awww how pretty is this poem especially the birds I hear them at night getting ready for bed(the birds that is lol) I find nothing to add or correct
Raj this poem had a very soothing affect on this reader

raj

4 years 11 months ago

Hi Chrys

thanks for taking time to read. Good to know you liked this poem and it had a soothing effect.

thanks again..

Gracy

4 years 11 months ago

Hello raj, what lovely, well

Hello raj, what lovely, well crafted poems. One is a perfect haiku, it's almost alive. Could you please explain the whole structure, because I see you have some 2-liners in between. Does it have a distinct name and form?
Thanks so much for sharing your art with us, Gracy

raj

4 years 11 months ago

Hello Gracy

thanks for taking time to read and your comment....coming from learned poets like you it's like tonic to an amateur like me..

as to the form of 5 liner poem with first three lines having 5-7-5 followed by next two of 7-7 syllables, it is a Japanese form called Tanka... a series of them is called Renga though supposed to be written by two people...Barbara used to conduct workshops on them in the past...

thanks again...

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

How nice...

to have learned something that will bring pleasure. ~ Geez.
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raj

4 years 11 months ago

Thanks Geezer

for visiting this page and your comment...

be well..