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No More Elephants
new nursery rhymes cry frick, frack
can't climb that hill now, little jack
it's cracked and filled with dirty money
can't see it now, it's never sunny
steel and concrete guts fart poison
over sick trees in once air
sharp-toothed jaws toss shavings
on definitions in old dictionary pages
one day we will forget these things
they looked like tiny broccoli's
they went extinct with honeybees
through the seas metallic behemoths scream
mimicking love songs of once whales
disconnected
nothing left decomposing connected
cracked tusks sink into the sands of time
like the fallen teeth of obese babies
sinking into deep blankets soiled with the filth of their waste
turn again turn
permanent burn
churned by the hands of the mighty
yearning, burning, churning, spinning
what, after all, are a million gone
when there are seven million left
undiscovered now to never be
or to live to be called once
beside that hidden waterfall
too late to go where we started
tongues have fallen out, fingers are broken
king midas and his brothers still squat on gold
black honey still runs beneath the grounds
where they built their palaces and burial mounds
souls are still bought and souls are still sold
heaven's still up and hell's still down
one animal alone has dominion now
the cow can no more jump over the moon
this animal, soul cannibal, flesheater at birth
liked a little too much salt of the earth
the microscopic, some defeated, some the winners
the inferior has chance to beat superior
once strong stand guard in closed museums
book pages have rotted, now we read on screens
no one anynmore knows of paper pages
we have won - we have conquered mother earth
we sit alone in our solitary cages
communication down on keyboard keys
no one types anymore about old trees
or products of chemicals and scoundrels
newspapers meaningless calories
homo sapiens' skeletons rust in the dust
half of humanity gone but still plenty of us
there are no more diamonds in old coal mines
clocks shatter when time runs out of time
About This Poem
Last Few Words: i don't think this is the best poem i ever wrote. my mood determines my choice. sometimes the one with near perfect rhyme and rhythm i love, but it does not have the deepest subject matter. i wrote this some time ago and have really not posted it so i will give it a shot here
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
5 years 2 months ago
I was...
distracted by the many sub-themes and was wishing that I could see where you tied them all together. This could be as many as three or four different poems and they would all have something to say. ~ Geezer.
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