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Apr 24, 2023
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No more the fool
Open wide and ever seeing
Unshackled and believing
Blinkers off to allow
Absence of all that's sallow
Refusing to swallow the pill
Standing up in strong will
To see them eat humble pie
Oh yet you may well ask but why
For rose coloured specs are no more
Trampled and discarded on the floor
A forgotten and useless tool
For no more am I the fool
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is a sociopolitical poem. Born from a great feeling of angst towards the state of our politics and the growing Inequality in Britain now.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
2 years 2 months ago
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "No more the fool" is a bold and empowering piece that celebrates the speaker's liberation from ignorance and naivety. The use of vivid imagery and strong language evokes a sense of determination and strength in the reader. The poem's structure is simple yet effective, with each line flowing naturally into the next.
One suggestion for line edit would be to change "A forgotten and useless tool" to "A tool now forgotten and useless" to improve the flow and rhythm of the line.
Overall, "No more the fool" is a well-crafted poem that delivers a powerful message of self-empowerment and growth. The language and imagery make it an engaging and thought-provoking read.
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Tigger Kaz
2 years 2 months ago
Re no more a fool
A forgotten and useless tool,
Then rhymes with
No more the fool.
If I change to suggestion, then I would need to change my last line surely.. Else I ruin my rhyming cuplets.
Geezer
2 years 2 months ago
Oh, the world...
of discontent, I feel your frustration in the poem that you have written. I understand. I agree that the AI has not taken the rhyme into account. ~ Geezer.
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Ruby Lord
2 years 2 months ago
Your poem is great and I
Your poem is great and I agree on your comments to AI. I don't think he gets the idea of rhyming structure?
I understand the angst you are feeling about our current political system and it is not a good place to be in right now, especially where every action they take appears to be loaded with under currents of slease and manipulation.
I hope in time and soon, we can overcome what they have done and we learn and grow so we can make the political system less of a form of control for those with personal desires over the majority :(
Tigger Kaz
2 years 1 month ago
I wish
Unfortunately I fear things will only get worse, and not better.
I am 51, and things have been getting progressively worse over the last 40 odd years.
Yet most people are either not bothered by the corrupt practices, or they are distracted elsewhere - so thru seem oblivious to what is going on.