Nobody's somebody.

You know I'm there that pushed aside stray,
I'm society's forsaken castaway.
We're nobody's somebody, suffering with a secret tear,
In a world that wasn't made to be fair,
where are those that truly care.

I'm the frightened child crying myself to sleep when daddy has beaten me,
I'm your neighbor living in wretched poverty.
I'm a starving baby dying in a mothers arms,
while you go about buying your daily charms.

I'm the independent woman fighting for my rights,
I'm a different color but I feel pain just like the whites.
I'm frail and old with failing memory and one foot in the grave,
frustrated by your vulgar attitude with a crooked finger wave.

I once lived a life with a true love that I cruelly lost,
I'm a descendant of an indigenous holocaust.
We're the little children orphaned by tragedy and selfishness,
as influential leaders promote division and talk is meaningless.

I'm the injured soldier of warfare back home with futile hope,
I'm a lonely child hooked on dope.
I'm that person who loves another of the same sex,
as the interpreted word of God has made individual lives so complex.

I'm the family member facing death because of cancer,
I'm the angst ridden teenager looking for an answer.
I'm the special needs kid that's wants to be accepted,
as you go about clutching technological devices to feel you're truly connected.
Pushed aside stray
forsaken castaway
shedding secret tears
in a world that isn't made to be fair,
We're nobody's somebody,
where are those care truly?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Writing has never been a strong point with me, I've usually got a good idea of the subject matter I want to write about, I'm usually happy with the point I'm trying make. Anyway, I'm here to learn to write decent poetry.

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: usa-florida, USA

Favorite Poets: No favorite poets as of yet. I just enjoy the written word and the way some poets/writers phrase their words.

Comments

Vivovon

9 years 1 month ago

Welcome to neopoet. Like you,

Welcome to neopoet. Like you, I am a novice. The theme and message are clear. Rhymes are good, but still, it sounds more of short simple sentences than a poem to me. For example, this is what I would do:

shortened to:

Pushed aside stray
forsaken castaway
shedding secret tears
in a world that isn't made to be fair,
We're nobody's somebody,
where are those care truly?

Remember, I am just a novice. My idea may be flawed. No matter what, I enjoy reading your poem. Welcome and thank you.

The Mancunian

9 years 1 month ago

Thanks.

I appreciate your comments Vivovon. Your suggestion for that particular verse makes a lot of sense to shorten to that way. :)

Vivovon

9 years 1 month ago

Noble of you

Dear Mancunian,

It is very noble of you to appreciate my humble suggestion. Keep up with your dream and good work.

Cheers!

Esker

9 years 1 month ago

Ive been readin poems as a kid in 79 to now fifty three 2016

these are sentences but its great
it needs too be said
like a flyer on the corner
I got your hook
and I love it....
cause I lived all of your words
and simple simon said the pieman
it worked in fuedal times wihch
have become us once again

change nothing
trust no one
but your own intuition
take from what U know
best.........

if your delviing..its a good
delve/
I lived shelters..the road
diggin from dumpsters
undre autocrats till
they slowly edged me
out..no goodbye nor far well
wealth nestled with them
no prob..I found my way
worked it from the ground
level which taught me much
and street level is mute
secret societs got nothing
on the masses....
they..the simplisitc masses
got mere HEre..
Enjoy your craft your intuition
and delving times as a poet

I wont beat about the bush
Im no f***** novice
intuition saved my ass
not sweet words
for meat on the bone
full of its fat sustains
not the cheap candy lustre

I think Ur a helluva a poet
pull it in a little and fire
away of the condensed
feelings U got..
I hear U loud and clear
in this one..
thank U
I lived this
and still am surviving
well with many bros
and sis on my side

and by the way

Welcome To Neopoet
friend!

Mr Wolf!