a nonet attempt: By eddy styx

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, "a nonet attempt: By eddy styx", demonstrates a good understanding of the nonet form, which is a nine-line poem with a syllable count that decreases by one with each line. The poem maintains this structure effectively.

The use of imagery, such as "slinking down the alley at midnight" and "eddy styx drew his cloak up tight", creates a vivid picture of the character and setting. This helps to engage the reader and immerse them in the poem's narrative.

The poem's theme appears to be centered around a character involved in crime, as suggested by lines like "His standing in crime" and "on streets of grime". However, the connection between this theme and the final word, "Death", could be made clearer. The abrupt ending may leave readers unsure of the poem's message or the fate of the character.

In terms of rhythm, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter. While the syllable count decreases as intended in a nonet, the rhythm of the poem feels somewhat disjointed due to the varying number of stresses in each line.

The poem could also benefit from more use of literary devices such as metaphor, simile, or personification to add depth and complexity. The current language is quite literal and straightforward, which may limit the poem's ability to evoke emotion or provoke thought in the reader.

In conclusion, while the poem demonstrates a good understanding of the nonet form and uses effective imagery, it could be improved by clarifying its theme, refining its rhythm, and incorporating more literary devices.

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goes well with the theme chosen!
Only one syllable is missed in the third line, easy fix.
(His) head, held down, no disgrace.
Other than that, I think you have a crisp piece here that I have much enjoyed!
Thank you for sharing!

I second Rula's suggestion for the third line, and overall affirmation! Crisp...and also, creepy!
Thank you!
L

got it! I agree, this is a creepy one. I can see eddy slinking along, ready to pounce! I believe eddy is the type that just takes advantage of whatever situation he finds himself in. If for instance, he thought that you have more wealth than you deserve, he wouldn't shrink from putting a "shiv" in you a couple of times, just to take your purse.
I do see something that I agree with the A.I on, and many of you may have gotten the hint from me, that the sounds of words sometimes make or break a line. Good work, I love seeing you tackle new subjects, but I like 'eddy' as much.
~ Geez.
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I agree with everything said. I appreciate that you study poetry so much. This personality Eddy is very creepy indeed!