Neopoem Of The Week week of May 15 2022

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NOT NAKED

I'm not voiceless
surely not a dog that can't bark

I'm not dumb and mute
certainly not a lion that can't roar

Like the adornment of a new bride
the shell adorns a snail

Like the night broods the dawn
the albumen covers the yolk

Like the pregnant sky put
a smile on the face of the earth
your charity has rubbed the powder
of gladness on the face of my heart

Like an aesthetic painting
the stripes beautify a Zebra

Like a coat of many colours
feathers give birds an edge
in the realm of flying creatures

I'm not naked
men are my raiment of royal rest
I'm not naked
people are my garments of honour
that speak the diction of love.

'Dunni Ebenco

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft