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Jun 01, 2025
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Nothing but grey sky
Today there is Nothing but grey sky Later on is going to rain I have been walking For 1 hour already I am not made of ice I am made of Flesh and bones Also it is very cold out It is -9 with the windshield effect I miss the sunny days During the Spring That I need so bad I also missing the vitamin d That I need so bad Now it is time to check my Blood With the glucometer My reading was normal The glucometer never lies Now it got dark inside my house It is time for me to turn the Lights on Inside my house And inside my house is now bright And the night is here I must say that I am feeling Tired Already so I am going to try To go to bed early today I am not sure about the weather Tomorrow Yes I hope to be up early tomorrow AIso I left all the windows open So I could air my house And I also will be awaken By the birds
About This Poem
Last Few Words: That is a new poem Written by AIdo Kraas
Style/Type: Free verse
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Consider working on clarity and conciseness to strengthen the poem. Currently, the poem reads as a series of straightforward statements, which can feel repetitive and dilute emotional impact. To enhance reader engagement, consider using more vivid imagery or sensory details to evoke the atmosphere of the grey sky, cold weather, and the longing for spring. Additionally, the poem shifts abruptly between topics—weather, physical sensations, medical checks, and household routines—without clear connections. Consider creating smoother transitions or thematic links between these elements to unify the poem's structure. Lastly, pay attention to grammar and punctuation, as clearer sentence structures can help readers better follow the intended rhythm and meaning.
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