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Nothing Left To Give

Depleted, wary
Drained of all my senses
For a moment, I was alive
But succumbed to numbness

Try as I might
There is nothing left to give
Drowning in memories
Choking on my tears

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About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

Beautiful

I’ve said these words so many times in so many ways. I’m pretty sure you say it better, though I wish you didn’t have to. Get some rest tomorrow’s absurdities await your embrace. Excellent poem that is highly accessible to any reader in both language and subject.

I’m here often so don’t hesitate,
Tim

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 6 months ago

Hi Tim

Thank you for your kind words and understanding. I am grateful for my Neo family.

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

Beautiful

I’ve said these words so many times in so many ways. I’m pretty sure you say it better, though I wish you didn’t have to. Get some rest tomorrow’s absurdities await your embrace. Excellent poem that is highly accessible to any reader in both language and subject.

I’m here often so don’t hesitate,
Tim

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

dear Carrie,

I strongly, heart-wrenchingly feel it! get through today as best you can...

*hugs, Cat

Rula

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Dear Carrie

I am sorry to know you're experiencing such difficult emotions. I must say the piece is so expressive and you were able with so few words to feel what you udergo.
I know you can overcome whatever difficulties you're facing because you know are able to point out your problem. Time and writing will hopefully heal the wounds.
Keep them coming.
We're listening .
Be safe dear.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 6 months ago

Thank you

Writing certainly serves as an outlet. I am grateful for my Neo family always willing to lend an ear and support. Part of what makes this site great!

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Nothing Left To Give

Hi, Carrie,
Affecting and concise poetry. I'm reading a few days after you published, and hoping you've had better days in between. Warmest regards to you.
L

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 6 months ago

Sorry it took...

so long to get back to this one. I must have missed it when I was having a sick day. I feel like you should have a much better time of things, since life has been so difficult for you the last year or two. You know you have my ear and anything we can do, just ask. I liked the work, but not the subject, I hope that things are better for all of us this year, especially you! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 6 months ago

Hi Gee

Thank you! It sure has been a rough couple years for all of us. I have had a lot of sick days recently myself. I appreciate the kind words and the read as always.