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Dec 21, 2022
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Nothing Left To Give
Depleted, wary
Drained of all my senses
For a moment, I was alive
But succumbed to numbness
Try as I might
There is nothing left to give
Drowning in memories
Choking on my tears
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 6 months ago
Beautiful
I’ve said these words so many times in so many ways. I’m pretty sure you say it better, though I wish you didn’t have to. Get some rest tomorrow’s absurdities await your embrace. Excellent poem that is highly accessible to any reader in both language and subject.
I’m here often so don’t hesitate,
Tim
RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
Hi Tim
Thank you for your kind words and understanding. I am grateful for my Neo family.
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 6 months ago
Beautiful
I’ve said these words so many times in so many ways. I’m pretty sure you say it better, though I wish you didn’t have to. Get some rest tomorrow’s absurdities await your embrace. Excellent poem that is highly accessible to any reader in both language and subject.
I’m here often so don’t hesitate,
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 6 months ago
dear Carrie,
I strongly, heart-wrenchingly feel it! get through today as best you can...
*hugs, Cat
RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
One day at a time
Yesterday was a rough one...today we shall see...
Rula
2 years 6 months ago
Dear Carrie
I am sorry to know you're experiencing such difficult emotions. I must say the piece is so expressive and you were able with so few words to feel what you udergo.
I know you can overcome whatever difficulties you're facing because you know are able to point out your problem. Time and writing will hopefully heal the wounds.
Keep them coming.
We're listening .
Be safe dear.
RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
Thank you
Writing certainly serves as an outlet. I am grateful for my Neo family always willing to lend an ear and support. Part of what makes this site great!
Ray Whitaker
2 years 6 months ago
Not your usual legnth
So short. Gets a point across well, tho.
RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
Thank you Ray
Sometimes less is more
Lavender
2 years 6 months ago
Nothing Left To Give
Hi, Carrie,
Affecting and concise poetry. I'm reading a few days after you published, and hoping you've had better days in between. Warmest regards to you.
L
RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
Slightly better
Thank you for the heartfelt comment.
Lavender
2 years 6 months ago
Warm hugs
for you!
Geezer
2 years 6 months ago
Sorry it took...
so long to get back to this one. I must have missed it when I was having a sick day. I feel like you should have a much better time of things, since life has been so difficult for you the last year or two. You know you have my ear and anything we can do, just ask. I liked the work, but not the subject, I hope that things are better for all of us this year, especially you! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
Hi Gee
Thank you! It sure has been a rough couple years for all of us. I have had a lot of sick days recently myself. I appreciate the kind words and the read as always.