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Sep 29, 2011
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Nothing More to Say
I held back waters, raging sea
for days, building inside me
words of contempment
spewed from your lips
weakened my resources
Days of sandbagging
building leveys
protect you from my wrath
gave way to alcohol
touching my lips
Now sea bursted
leaving no stone unturn
your city lay bare
eyes of those watching on
hoped I would just shut up
Tone down outrage?
soften blows to your ego?, but
what about my integrity
trampled down
left mangled
Now! I feel better
letting go anger, resentment
forgiving games
for my namesake
to hold no grudges
About This Poem
Last Few Words: sometimes holding back dosen't work. it only make you sick when you overlook great wrongs, and people take you for granted:)
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Barbara Writes
13 years 9 months ago
lonnie
I think vague for this piece is betterr because the details causing the sea to rage should be vague I think readers have there own reason for there sea to rage . therefore adding there own interpretation while I hold on to exact a little longer. maybe for another day of writing
Barbara Writes
13 years 9 months ago
lonnie
I think vague for this piece is betterr because the details causing the sea to rage should be vague I think readers have there own reason for there sea to rage . therefore adding there own interpretation while I hold on to exacts a little longer. maybe for another day of writing
Barbara Writes
13 years 9 months ago
thanks Rosi
i pondered those exact three points.
I'm glad you cleared it up for me.
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