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Mar 09, 2011
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Nothing in the Night
We are a waning gibbous
To become nothing in the night,
By orbit darkness worn
Until a shadowed smudge
With no further rounds to come.
Smudge to smudge,
Dusk to dusk,
The last reflected sliver of the sun
Of lighted nights and darkened days
Bright shined times and glowering sights,
Reflections launched
On eternal reverent trails,
Photon traces of a tale
Told unseen, untouched,
Yet still a signature
Of everything we have done,
To be hidden,
But forever present in the dark,
Our ephemeral light.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is a revision of an old NeoPoet post.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
14 years 4 months ago
I like this,
I like this , but i was given some advice when i first arrived on Neopoet, that being. Remove the capital letters from the begining of lines where they should not be. I think it would help here. This is a good poem and the message is good. Regards Roscoe..