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Oct 13, 2013
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Numb
Sitting here, head in hand
So tired, I can barely stand
Painful words, ricochet against the night
Heartbreak heard, a lover's mournful plight
Memories haunt me, you are everywhere I go
I loved you more than you will ever know
Looking around, I am numb
The tears threaten but won't come
Shut myself off from these feelings
Done with romantic dealings
One too many failures for me
Love, I beg of you, let me be
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I wasn't concerned with meter in this, just wrote from the heart
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
non sequitur
12 years ago
Wow !
this is what I would call an "emotive" write! I can totally relate and perhaps that's why it resonated for me. I find the last verse the most compelling and an excellent wrap up of the whole saga!
Good writing!
NS
Ps. If this is real, I have to tell you, it does get better! I.e the pain will pass!
lonlyhrtsclub13
12 years ago
this is becoming real
On the edge of not sure if things can be repaired...it has been years since my last broken heart but this is different ....
Ian.T
12 years ago
Carrie
Even as a man I have been there after a marriage of 35 years and finding the other half had started going out with others.
It is so hard and there are many days weeks of soul searching, blame and bad words.
Later, and I mean later they all move into a vague memory bank, where we store them as a lesson, and the things to look out for in future behaviour.
As I have said each will blame themselves no matter what, then the healing process starts, just take care that you think straight It will be hard. Loved the write, this is one way to come to grips with things also.
I will watch for your writes as usual, Yours Ian.T
lonlyhrtsclub13
12 years ago
the numbness
Is my defense to the whole situation...I don't want to feel whats coming next