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Alex Tanner
Alex Tanner
Aug 27, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Observations of an Amphibious Creature

Frog he hops,
Then he stops.
Tadpole sees.

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: Isle of Wight United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Poe, Swinburn, Bob Dylan, Spike Milligan, Alfred Noyes, Kipling., Many Others.

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Rula

Rula

1 year 1 month ago

Hello Alex

I don't claim that I'm getting this one hundred percent, but I always applaud the brevity that goes with a message and always assume that others are much brighter than I.
I thought it might have sth to do with growth and transformation,
Am I even close?

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

1 year 1 month ago

Hello Rula

Don't think about it. What is there to get? It's just three lines. Be brighter than most, don't look for what isn't there. Alex.

Lavender

Lavender

1 year 1 month ago

Observations of an Amphibious Creature

Hello, Alex!
Really like this! Fun title! The "aha" feeling I love in minimal, observational poetry. I'm right there with that tadpole...
I do wonder about removing "the" from the first and third lines. They don't seem necessary, and then you will have three crisp, 3-syllable lines. Just a thought.
Thank you!
L

Lavender

Lavender

1 year 1 month ago

Hello, Alex,

Just a big grin with this one. Somewhere out there, this is really going' on...
L