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Alex Tanner
Alex Tanner
Aug 27, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Observations of an Amphibious Creature

Frog he hops,
Then he stops.
Tadpole sees.

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: Isle of Wight United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Poe, Swinburn, Bob Dylan, Spike Milligan, Alfred Noyes, Kipling., Many Others.

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Rula

Rula

10 months ago

Hello Alex

I don't claim that I'm getting this one hundred percent, but I always applaud the brevity that goes with a message and always assume that others are much brighter than I.
I thought it might have sth to do with growth and transformation,
Am I even close?

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

10 months ago

Hello Rula

Don't think about it. What is there to get? It's just three lines. Be brighter than most, don't look for what isn't there. Alex.

Lavender

Lavender

10 months ago

Observations of an Amphibious Creature

Hello, Alex!
Really like this! Fun title! The "aha" feeling I love in minimal, observational poetry. I'm right there with that tadpole...
I do wonder about removing "the" from the first and third lines. They don't seem necessary, and then you will have three crisp, 3-syllable lines. Just a thought.
Thank you!
L

Lavender

Lavender

10 months ago

Hello, Alex,

Just a big grin with this one. Somewhere out there, this is really going' on...
L