Rula

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Ode To Early Flowers

As early flowers blush and bloom
The weary hearts long for a roam
Away from where once lived the gloom
As early flowers blush and bloom
I rush with thrush out there to loom
And bring the warmth back up to home
Where early flowers blush and bloom
Where weary hearts long for a roam

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Geezer

2 years 7 months ago

Yes...

there certainly is something to be said for the smell of fresh flowers! It makes the whole house smell like Spring! Happy Spring to you! I like the simplicity of this one! ~ Geez.
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Rula

2 years 7 months ago

Thank you sir Gee

I'm blushing that my blooming flowers called you in.
Always great to hear from you.

Candlewitch

2 years 7 months ago

dear Rula,

I love the Lilac bushes that we have in our yard. in spring, they bloom and we cut some to have in the house, leaving the rest for the neighbors to enjoy. we have the wrong kind of soil for tulips. I much enjoyed your poem. it is always good to see/read you!

*hugs, Cat

Rula

2 years 7 months ago

Hello dear

Thank you for taking the time to read me and commenting. Ok t always fills my heart with pleasure to see a fellow poet appreciate my words..
Thank you as always dear.

Lavender

2 years 7 months ago

Ode to Early Flowers

Hello, Rula!
A beautiful ode! I know you like tight rhyme and rhythm, and this is perfect! Eight lines with eight meters each. Reading your poem helps get me through these cold, dark days. So lovely.
Thank you!
L

Rula

2 years 7 months ago

Dear Lavender

So kind of you to give my work your time. It adds to my plaure to know that you like it. Unfortunately, I found out that it needs to be 12 lines at least, so I decided to withdraw from the contest.
Thank you again dear.

Geezer

2 years 7 months ago

Why not...

add another four lines and resubmit it? ~ Geez.
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Rula

2 years 7 months ago

Thank you for

the offer sir Geezer. I thought about it, unfortunately the Triolet is a very strict form of ONLY eight lines with the 1st,4th and 7th are repeated as well as 2nd and 8th.
Again appreciate your time.
Thank you

Lavender

2 years 7 months ago

Hi, Rula,

In its unique form, it is a remarkable poem. You are so clever with different types of structured poetry, I would imagine there is another form that could express your message as lovely!
L

lovedly

2 years 7 months ago

minor point from me

you may like to replace
''home and roam''
as the stress throughout
is on loom boom....
doom fume....
may c tomb womb or google for more

Rula

2 years 7 months ago

Thank you Lovedly

for the suggestion.
As I clarified to sir Geezer this is a strict form with
the rhyme scheme ABaAabAB, where capital letters are representing the repeated lines.
Again thank you for your time. Much appreciate it.

RoseBlack

2 years 7 months ago

Hi Rula

A simple, elegant poem. I love the smell of fresh flowers and this brought them to life for me.

Rula

2 years 7 months ago

Hello Rose

Thank you for taking the time to read my little piece and commenting. It's my pleasure to know that it evokes such pleasant memories dear.

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 7 months ago

This is great

I can smell the ozone on the spring air. Here the Crocus and hyacinths are first up but it’s when the daffodils and tulips pop that I live for. I’m not a fan of winter.

Tim