Oh Hush Now My Baby

Oh hush now my baby and start into dreaming -
The day has expired and the stars fill the sky;
Your room is filled up with the moon’s brilliant beaming,
And angels have come to protect you and I.

From out in the field I hear crickets sing after
The sound of a coo from a sweet mourning dove;
They sing every night and live life full of laughter,
Because they have peace from the master above.

Oh rest now my precious and know God is present,
The maker of all of the seas and the lands;
He loves every person, both noble and peasant,
And holds all the cares of the world in His hands.

When sleep comes eternal I pray you’ll be singing
In glory, in splendor, in honor, and praise;
I pray in His arms you’ll be holding and clinging,
And be filled with laughter for infinite days.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: I have many and not in any particular ranking or order:, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, Alfred Lord Tennyson, Edgar Allan Poe, Robert Frost, Rudyard Kipling, Emily Dickinson, Maya Angelou, Eugene Field, Edgar Guest, William Cullen Bryant, Langston Hughes, Ogden Nash, Christina Rossetti, William Blake, William Shakespeare, James Whitcomb Riley

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neopoet

1 year 9 months ago

Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Oh Hush Now My Baby" demonstrates a clear understanding of rhyme and meter, which contributes to its overall rhythm and flow. The ABAB rhyme scheme is consistent throughout the poem, which helps to create a sense of harmony and balance.

The use of imagery is also evident in this poem, particularly in the line "Your room is filled up with the moon’s brilliant beaming," which paints a vivid picture for the reader. This helps to create a sense of atmosphere and setting.

However, the poem could benefit from a more varied use of language and metaphor. For example, the line "And holds all the cares of the world in His hands" is a common phrase that could be reimagined in a more original way to add depth and interest to the poem.

Additionally, the poem's message, while clear, could be developed further. While the theme of divine protection and love is evident, it could be explored in a more nuanced way to add complexity to the poem.

Finally, the poem could benefit from a more careful use of punctuation. For example, the use of a dash in the line "Oh rest now my precious and know God is present -" disrupts the flow of the poem and could be replaced with a comma for a smoother reading experience.

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Lavender

1 year 9 months ago