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OK, Very Nice In view of the discouraging comments

OK, Very Nice In view of the discouraging comments
should this poem be removed
your comments please.
Particular the best critiques
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Very Nice
The three poems
You will read today
Are the ones
I wrote two years ago
When none read me
Over here
So it makes a difference
In as I always say
What’s in a name?

Everything is ones name
The vibrations,
It’s tuning of the heart,
As ones harp,
A melodious vibration of voice
Of love,
Of emotion
And
Above all
Of basic human commotion.

To my mind that's all what poetry,
In its prosaic
Or
Any modern manifestation
Is all about

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ROU

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Comments

mona

mona

14 years 6 months ago

Dear Loved,,,, Discouraging NOT Encouraging to improve ......

Dear Loved,,,, Discouraging NOT Encouraging to improve your writing YES.

I told you my opinion through PMs, and I don't see any beauty of a literary work here.
just few statments, nothing more.I can't even call it a poem.

your Libyan friend

Frederick Kesner

Frederick Kesner

14 years 6 months ago

Ah, yes

The poem is an extension, a recording if you will
of the voice of the individual soul that travels
from within into the frontiers without
thereby each voice as it resonates must be heard
and accorded its rightful respect.

K

Kailashana2

14 years 6 months ago

Loved.

Loved.

Someday we'll all understand who you are. And the poetry that you wrote will have been the first of its kind. ;-)

Until then, keep on keeping on....

~A