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Nov 01, 2016
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old lust did rust
lusty love
first lust
then love!
How do you say
lust is not a need
after lust only
comes
love indeed
as lovers today
are born each day,
out of wedlock
by lust as they say
when a new babe is born
on a sunny day
many wait for that day
when that lover
new one will grow
in their desired
hubbys way
later lust will be returned
in exchange of love
so love is lust
and
nothing more,
I am quite sure,
what my master
once did say
love lies
between
the thighs
Ah! that’s the only way.
but of course
one has to be right
off course
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Keith Logan
8 years 8 months ago
Good poem with a viewpoint
Not sure I can concur too closely with that viewpoint but that in no way invalidates the issue, nor the fact it is well written.
lovedly
8 years 8 months ago
thanks Keiths
as we age
we change
at least in perspective
Sparrow
8 years 8 months ago
Loved
One of your pieces that has dragged the soil once more, maybe we should issue you a challenge.
The one that writes the best poem about changes, be it seasons weather or just the mind, a title of Changes will suffice.
Getting away from this inner thigh bits and lost loves lol.
A good write though but I do challenge you to write at least 30 lines on Changes,
Yours Ian..
lovedly
8 years 8 months ago
I read this now Ian
read my comment
as quickly as you can
shall order a medical change
as you need it
may be
soonly
Sparrow
8 years 8 months ago
Loved
I have created a blog for your poem on Changes and there will be a few others joining in so be at your best..
Yours, as always, Ian..
lovedly
8 years 8 months ago
sea change..... c
reversed
I have posted poem first
now 'tis a comment
for you
second
at worst