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May 19, 2025
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Oliver's Catfished Dreams
A young bloke, soft heart,
looked online for a friend.
Thought he'd find fair dinkum mates,
hit scams instead, hard knocks.
Fagin's emails landed,
slick with sweet talk.
Promised fortunes, easy coin.
"Just a few quid," he'd reckon,
"To unlock my stash, truly."
Oliver, trusting as they come,
sent his hard-earned cash.
Learned slow, the hard way
he'd been had, hook, line, and sinker.
Now he walks wary, sadder maybe,
through the bytes and screens.
Trust wears thin online now.
No more chasing mirages for this chap,
from dial-up days to 5G speeds,
he spots fresh traps miles off.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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Frederick Kesner
1 month 1 week ago
...most definitely watch the
...most definitely watch the space assigned for audience participation!
Rula
1 month 1 week ago
A good lesson indeed CrypticBard
One that all the youngsters need to learn.
An important message poetically well delivered !
Thank you for sharing!
Frederick Kesner
1 month ago
And there are various
And there are various learning tracks out there... usually the hard way is the default and most popular one. Most welcome Rula and thanks for gracing my page as always. :)
Michael Anthony
1 month 1 week ago
Enjoyed this CB! Beware of
Enjoyed this CB! Beware of Nigerian princes too - LOL!
Best
Frederick Kesner
1 month ago
Oh indeed! Had several run
Oh indeed! Had several run ins with a few princesses and such over the years. This poem though was a contemporary spin on Oliver Twist. Thanks heaps for dropping in.
Best
CB