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scribbler
Jun 07, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

FOR ONCE, TO SEE

I've sped this interstate before
with horses racing 'neath the hood
while thoughts of work pecked at my core;
no attention spared for field or wood.

But this afternoon the snow flakes swarm
clearing most traffic from my route.
I switch heater to hot from warm
attempting to keep the chill out.

Then suddenly I'm forced to slow
by a wave of sudden thick whiteout
and as I gradually cease to go
I take time to think and look about.

Dense deep woods crowd from either side
cloaked in a shroud of purest white
which blowing snow's trying to hide
and likely will before the night.

In a near blink the snow is past
and all is clearly on display,
all this beauty I've too often passed
while speeding on my merry way.

I'd rather stay but have to go
for there's much to do before day's done
so I start my truck in twilight's glow.
Tasks and time await no one.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

good

It is an updated attempt at that same poem lol

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tyro

7 years 1 month ago

this has the same colloquial

this has the same colloquial feel as poems by Frost
I think you did a wonderful job at the update.
and by the way, the title is spot on.

"while thoughts of work pecked at my core;
no attention spared for field or wood." now isn't this just a true sign of modern life

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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

Hi tyro

This is the first time I've intentionally tried to write an updated version of an old master's poems so I'm pleased that you say I managed to maintain the original "feel" . Appreciate the visit.......stan

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raj

7 years 1 month ago

Hi Stan

this poem is yet another example of creating the mood and images by someone who eats, breathes, sleeps and dreams in rhyme...your craft is one of its kind...FOR ONE'S LIKE ME TO SEE
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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

Hi raj

I don't rhyme all the time . I'm just a bumbler as a poet and I know it. LOL. Thanks for dropping by

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raj

7 years 1 month ago

Stan

if i may venture I would ask Susan if she would at times like free verse because it's said variety is the spice of life...know what i mean? .:)
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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

Hmmm......

It HAS been a while since I posted a free verse hasn't it? And you are also right about poetry lol

IRiz

IRiz

7 years 1 month ago

Thank you for taking me to

Thank you for taking me to the world of snow and twilight it feels good for a change. Our summer kicked in with so much greenery that it is dark in my house. It is TWIGlight !!!

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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

Hi Riz

90 degrees here today. I wish for a bit of snow also lol. I know what you mean by the leaves at least blocking some sun from my home. I have 3 hundred year old oaks shielding me. Thanks for coming by....stan

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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

OK, OK

Don't nag!. I'll comment on at least one of yours tonite......stan