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Neopoem Of The Week November 26th 2023 to December 2nd 2023
Once Upon a Dream
I grab your arms
And guide you to the edge of the sidewalk
As people from behind you
Are trying to pass
I don't immediately let go of your arms...
I let them linger on your skin
Trying to engrain in my heart
what your touch feels like
You notice my hesitation to pull away
And take a slow step closer
Gently turning me against the wall
Ever so slowly you let your body
Get closer to mine
My hands still on your arms
Your touch has marked my soul
You press your body against mine
And hug me softly
Letting our hearts beat together
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Geezer
1 year 7 months ago
This sounds like...
only part fantasy. Like a thing you might think is possible. Hmmmm? ~ Geezer.
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Kristen H.
1 year 6 months ago
If only...
Something I know will never happen, though I want it to. I will update with another poem if it ever happens.
Geezer
1 year 6 months ago
I'm sure you will...
I see that in your work. Good luck. Now, go off and write another one in your own indomitable style. ~ Geezer.
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Kristen H.
1 year 6 months ago
Thank you...
Very much, Geezer. I'll do my best :)
Candlewitch
1 year 6 months ago
Dear Kristen,
I agree with Geezer on all points!
*hugs, Cat
Kristen H.
1 year 6 months ago
Thank you...
so much, Candlewitch! You both are very much appreciated! :)