One and Only

Oh, let this sonnet fall on deafened ears
for rarely do I reap the words I sow
I've wandered, squandered, many youthful years
I've barely learned the simple things I know

That I have learned has been a thing of chance
Enigmas rule my sureties in life
A sailing man in winds of changing dance
A wonder I have settled with a wife

Oh, sorrow never seems to follow me
When she is happy, so becomes my own
But she will never share the rolling sea
These times, I do prefer to sail alone

That time, I am an independent man
Though I remain her loyal, lonely fan

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A quick sonnet since they seem to be catching on around here. A simple idea set in simple vocabulary. Hope you enjoy it!

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Country/Region: Lake Simcoe Canada

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel,

Comments

Lavender

6 months 2 weeks ago

One and Only

Hello, Thomas,
An intriguing title and theme, the rhythm pattern is spot on, 10 syllables per line - a wonderful sonnet. So much is captured in this disciplined, structured form. This is lovely.
Thank you!
L

Triskelion

6 months 2 weeks ago

Hi Lavender

Thank you for reading and leaving a comment. I find when writing sonnets, it's helpful to use simple vocabulary to maintain the meter and syllable count. More complex language like you use can always be edited in later. Glad you liked it.

Thomas

Rula

6 months 2 weeks ago

This is beautiful. sir Thomas

Enough to fulfill your woman's pride.
I especially like the simple vocabulary.
Some poets started to deviate from the strict iambic and syllable count, but I still like the sonnets for their strictness.
Writing a sonnet will remain a challenge that a few can meet. Yours absolutely is one of those.
Much enjoyed.
Thank you for sharing!

Triskelion

6 months 2 weeks ago

Hi Rula!

...deviation from the strict guidelines regarding this form is something I am guilty of, of course. It is a challenging form after all, and sometimes the word you really, really want to use can disrupt the flow. I think my last sonnet is evidence.
I've noticed online, a (guideline) applying to individual words and how they can be practically used metrically, but not sure I'm ready to go there yet.

Thanks for reading and enjoying this!

Thomas

Ruby Lord

6 months 2 weeks ago

How lovely, a sonnet to make

How lovely, a sonnet to make any mans wife blush. Very good, Ruby xxx :)

Triskelion

6 months 2 weeks ago

Hey, Ruby!

Glad you liked this "little song". It's not as flowery as a lot of sonnets, but it is metrically correct and there is a message of romance, which is fitting for this form. Let's say it's something a sailor might write. Thanks for your comment!

Thomas