One More Tear

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "One More Tear" effectively captures the overwhelming nature of grief and the intense emotions associated with it. The use of vivid imagery, such as comparing grief to a tsunami or being hit by a freight train, effectively conveys the power and impact of this emotion. The repetition of phrases like "It makes you cry so hard you can't breathe" and "It makes you so heavy you can't lift yourself out of bed" adds emphasis and reinforces the intensity of the pain.

One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure and rhythm of the poem. Currently, the poem consists of short, declarative sentences, which can create a sense of urgency and intensity. However, introducing some variation in sentence length and structure could add depth and complexity to the poem. For example, experimenting with longer, more descriptive sentences or incorporating enjambment could create a more dynamic flow.

Additionally, the poem could benefit from further exploration of the emotional journey of grief. While the poem effectively portrays the

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This is really good, touching and it tells it like it is. Great poem, well done, Ruby :)

Once again, grief has touched my family's life. Not so much me directly, but a niece, that is absolutely devastated over her father's death by criminal action. A brutal thing, that is far from over. You have captured that crushing, heavy, emotion.
She will survive; much as I think your person here will. I will argue for your short, expressive lines; because I know you are short on everything, at the moment. You have neither breath to waste or the ability to think. Good job!
~ Geez.
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I liked the essence of the poem. Grief is evident.

Stanzas vary in lines, just a thought.