"Hallmark" are those nasty people that play with the tiny verses..
You have to watch out for them they are found under the keys of your computer, taunting you to rhyme, so they can steal your words,
Sending them out in bland cards to make money on the Pagan seasons they so love, as the Christians have made them Holy.
So take care have a great day, Yours Ian.T

weirdelf

13 years 3 months ago

thanks lonnie

everyone is welcome to critique workshop poems, that's why they appear on the stream, and in this case I merely bask in the praise.

The only time it can be a slight problem is when people critique not knowing the workshop context it is written in. For example I have several times instructed participants to ignore other poetic values while just getting say their meter or rhyme correct.

judyanne

13 years 3 months ago

'when my life if full of strife'

do you mean 'is full of strife' jess?

great tanka
love judy
xxx

weirdelf

13 years 3 months ago

yep

ta
well spotted

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

nice one Jess

i like it and see no issues to critique

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

nice one Jess

i like it and see no issues to critique

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

i like the tone

this is all me personally so, the only change i would make, would be in the tone, replacing televisions shows with "new technology" lol
great tanka i wouldnt change a thing seriously.

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

i like the tone

this is all me personally so, the only change i would make, would be in the tone, replacing televisions shows with "new technology" lol
great tanka i wouldnt change a thing seriously.

Ian.T

13 years 3 months ago

Barbara Barbara

I I see see that that you you have have a a problem problem with with doubles doubles,
You You could could go go to to specsavers specsavers, Yours, Yours,
Sparrow Sparrow xx

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

dont kow

dont know wht it doubling i only hit once

BlueDemon77

13 years 2 months ago

Synchronicity my lad Jess, happens to me all the time.

I really enjoyed this. It describes "a causal link between acausal events" or coincidence, whichever you choose. Good Tanka.

Ron

Blue Demon77

weirdelf

13 years 2 months ago

thanks Ron

a fan of Jung myself. Bizarre things happened during the getting and reading of his book Synchronicity.

scribbler

13 years 2 months ago

Hi Jess

And here I thought rhyme was forbidden in Japanese forms. Just shows what I know lol. And yes it seems at time that life imitates art just as art imitates life (if one considers TV art lol) Thanks for posting.........stan