Oneness, interrupted.

Growing weary of talking
at the end of the night
we fall into each other
loosing our grip
on the boundaries of Self
We begin to merge
becoming One

Then, she stirs
with a wriggle and
a trump
wakes with a smile

We laugh,
Our Oneness interrupted

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Comments

brittle light

14 years 7 months ago

oneness interruptus

"interruptus" might be funnier. cool plot theme!
I like this poem's lightness

faerybeki

14 years 7 months ago

Thanks Al :) glad the light

Thanks Al :) glad the light heartedness came across, will give the 'interruptus' thing some thought, can see it might add to the humour, thanks again, much love Beki xxx

faerybeki

14 years 7 months ago

Hey lovely, glad you liked it :) sure you can remember what it's like lol glad you're going to have a little break, rest up beautiful I'll be thinking of you, sending love and healing. Love you too, hugs back beki xxx

Kailashana2

14 years 7 months ago

First, it's wonderful to see

First, it's wonderful to see you. Love the poem, *Oneness interrupted*, how apt a description for many things, including Neopoet's crash, eh?

Big Hug.

faerybeki

14 years 7 months ago

Wonderful to see you too Anna

Wonderful to see you too Anna :) So glad you enjoyed the poem, and yes very apt eh? I only wish I had more time to dwell here in Neoland :) hope you're well. BIG love to you dear lady xxx

scribbler

14 years 7 months ago

onenes

the 1st 7 lines are such a good description of familiar love that they could stand alone as a poem themselves.........scribbler

faerybeki

14 years 7 months ago

Thanks scribbler :) glad you

Thanks scribbler :) glad you think the first bit could stand alone, I feel the little twist gives the poem a different edge and is definitely a reflection of my reality at the moment lol. much love Beki xxx

Psyve

14 years 5 months ago

Faerybeki,

I have been going through your posted works with growing admiration.
Your poems are short but touch a chord.... in several people, by the looks of it.

I enjoyed this little poem too. Every young parent will have experienced this particular... interruption.

Well written.

I am becoming a fan.

Psyve

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

ooooOOOooo a fan lol :)

ooooOOOooo a fan lol :) seriously, I'm touched you've gone through my posted works, good job tis a new Neo, it would have taken you ages on the old site ;) I haven't reposted any old stuff, these are all recent writes. I'm happy my writing touches a chord in you, I tend to write my life, a lot lol and I guess we all have similar experiences and emotions :) especially where parenting is concerned :) I hope to have time soon to repay the visit :) Thank You for your encouraging comments, I really appreciate them, much love Beki xxx