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Apr 19, 2013
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opaque dreams
O beautiful night
your black wings
extinguish the light
cloak me in darkness
paint my face in shade
for I am a shadow to life
existing on ash and soot
I am sustained in a void
covered in mother earth
my mask of horror is hidden,
but a full moon unveils my face
and the pall of depression bows
the ebony trail I shred
withdraws from inner light,
I shall subsist in shadows
until silence rules no more
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Frenchf
12 years 2 months ago
This has a religious flavour to it
As it meant to. It would do well for a prayer!interesting
Seren
12 years 2 months ago
Thanks French
I guess it does have a religious flavour thanks for the read and your thoughts
hugs JC
Josephus
12 years 2 months ago
Jayne, my wise friend
For all its darkness there is a strain of comfort in this, Jayne. As I read this I find myself thinking of a tulip bulb in warm moist earth waiting to sprout new life. Waiting "until silence rules no more"
sincerely,
Joe
Seren
12 years 2 months ago
Joe
Thanks for your thoughts and time, I am very happy you liked it
sincerely Jayne-Chloe
Ian.T
12 years 2 months ago
Jayne
Time to walk in the light it feeds the Spirit, though this write is as usual from you and will show where some go.
It is a shame that there is not more communication between people that need just someone there to hold the light for them, Yours Ian.Tx
Seren
12 years 2 months ago
Ian
Just needing someone to hold the light for them, beautifully sad and said hugs
love always JC xxx