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Opposites Attract
We’ve been married for many a year.
I like wine and he likes beer.
He talks a lot about world affairs,
politics and falling shares.
I like shopping in charity shops,
Tesco sales and coffee stops.
He likes cricket and detective films,
Doctor Who and magic realms.
I like Spring watch and BBC four.
Doc Martin and Patrick Moore.
He likes to read the “New Scientist”.
Not much else is on his list.
I like the moon and the starry sky,
where hawk moths and fairies fly.
He likes opera; a baritone voice,
G and S would be his choice.
I like flowers; a warm summer day.
The seaside and kids at play.
He likes football; like Portsmouth club.
Chinese ribs and lots of grub.
I like to rock, when the music beats;
Zynga games and chocolate treats.
He likes to chat, but wont suffer fools;
E type jags and greasy tools.
I like to talk about verse and prose,
house repairs and money woes.
He likes to cook! I like to eat
so I guess our life’s complete.
there again,
we both hate golf.…….
About This Poem
Last Few Words: G and S = Gilbert and Sullivan
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
11 years 8 months ago
Mand
Loved this write, if only all things were so easy to state lol.
I see you have mixed up the wife's and my likes and dislikes lol.
Good write though, I will send the correct list one day ???
Yours Ian.T
mand
11 years 8 months ago
Ha ha
Glad you liked it! I look forward to seeing your list! ha ha
Nice to see you - I'm away for a few days as of Friday - but I should be around ( unless anything crops up ) until then so hopefully I'll see you soon.
LOve Mand xxxx
Roscoe Lane
11 years 8 months ago
Verse four,
Verse four line two, did you mean (where hawk moth and fairies fly) apart from that it's humourously great. Love Roscoe...
mand
11 years 8 months ago
Thanks Roscoe
I always make that mistake - can't seem to get it into my head. he he
Glad you liked it!
Hope to see you soon. ( thanks for reading and commenting ) :)
Love Mand xxxxxx
Rula
11 years 8 months ago
Lovely Mand
Loved the spontaneity of this, and yes opposites attract.
The title seems to fit well too.
Thanks for sharing.
Seren
11 years 8 months ago
Mand
I think a lot of couples are chalk and cheese, me and my partner are we have very different tastes in things and this could have been written for us I thoroughly enjoyed the read the only boggle I have is these two lines
He likes to sing, like Pavarotti.
Trouble is he's out of key.
the rest of the poem has a wonderful flow but these two lines for me just didn't do it, just my opinion see what others think I maybe on the wrong track lol
love and hugs JC xxx
mand
11 years 8 months ago
Hi JC
Glad you pointed that out! I struggled with that line - I'll do a re-think and edit a.s.a.p. - Nice to know we are not the only couple with opposite likes and dislikes. He he
I appreciate your help! I hope all is well with you and yours
fanny haddock
11 years 8 months ago
great fun
enjoyed this Mand .... refreshing to read a snippet of humour, warm wishes, Fanny
mand
11 years 8 months ago
Hi Fanny!
Not near as good as your's me thinks - glad of your comment though! Nice to have you aboard.
Love Mand xxxx
alidzain
11 years 5 months ago
Mand
what can i say, nice work with choosing the title, the way you describe. I enjoyed it very much.....
Alid
mand
11 years 5 months ago
Ahh thanks Alid
Soo nice of you to say so. I really appreciate your lovely comment! I hope to come and read some of your work in the not to distant future - I wont give a specific time because it depends on my schedule - soonish, hopefully.
Thanks again!
Love Mand xxxxxxxx