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Oct 01, 2018
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At our age (OCTOBER 1)
We ought to be patriotic
We all obliged to be one.
despite our different tunes
we pledged to unites.
Peace, Love and Faith
we yelled and yelled
in strength and power.
We have what it takes
in assurance we called freedom.
Militarily the voyage began.
The solemnity song changed
as we crossed blood rivers
At our age! What can we call ours?
At our age! Where are we?
At our age! the birds are singing
back or forth,left or right.
At our age! Corruption our DNA.
At our age! Where is our hope?
At our age! save our nation o' God.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: been patriotism to our nation we suppose to have develop to biggest and organise country by now, But we lake patriotism, love, faith and even peace that is why we are now the most poorest nation on earth, despite our resources in abundance. These are what this poem is portraying.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
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Comments
raj
6 years 9 months ago
Hi Simon
your profound pride for your nation as too your sentiments can be sensed in these verses....
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Simon
6 years 3 months ago
Raj
Long time,
I know for sure that people of all kinds except few hats truth that's why see it as sentiment and a profound pride but you surprise me for seen it that way
Chiori
6 years 8 months ago
Good one
question's that Nigerian's have to answer
I also love this word here 'as we crossed blood river'
such an evocative poem
Simon
6 years 3 months ago
Chiori
Thanks for ur comment