Our Ballet

There is a torch I carry for you
Crafted from care and firm resolve
Bound by the tethers of our heartstrings
A dancing flame so inextinguishable
Eternity becomes furious with envy
As it watches our seductive ballet

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

Comments

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

So simple

And so pretty- there is always beauty in what you write! Good job!

Candlewitch

2 years 5 months ago

yes Tim,

very well done!

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

2 years 5 months ago

Looks like...

you have the women here under your spell. Nicely done! ~ Geez.
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Lavender

2 years 5 months ago

Our Ballet

Hello, Tim,
Very nice. I like your choice of the word "furious" - it enhances the entire torch / flame feeling.
L

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Dear Tim

This is superb work. I offer nothing but applause. You're fast becoming a favourite. This says so much in so few lines. This is a poem anyone can relate to and feel like it speaks of a love they had or have.

Bravo. I love it!!

Cheers J x