Out of Reality

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Out of Reality" presents a strong narrative voice, which is an effective tool in engaging the reader. However, the poem could benefit from more consistent use of imagery and metaphor. For instance, the lines "You been to/Hell so many times/They might as well/Give you a passport" and "Even the demon/On your shoulder/Is knocking to see/If you are there/Or gone for/the weekend" are vivid and engaging, but they stand out as the only such instances in the poem. More consistent use of such imagery could enhance the overall impact of the poem.

The poem also uses a conversational tone, which can be effective in creating a sense of intimacy with the reader. However, the tone sometimes becomes too casual, as in the lines "Excuse me do you get/Cell signal in that/Brain of yours/or is it out of range?" This could potentially disrupt the reader's engagement with the poem. It might be beneficial to consider whether this tone is consistent with the overall message and mood of the poem.

The poem's structure could also be improved. The stanzas are irregular, with no apparent pattern in terms of line or stanza length. While free verse can be a powerful form, it can also benefit from some degree of structure to guide the reader through the poem. Consider experimenting with more consistent stanza lengths or a more regular rhythm to enhance the poem's readability.

Lastly, the poem's message could be made clearer. The poem appears to be addressing someone who is struggling with self-doubt and encouraging them to see their strength and worth. However, this message could be made more explicit and developed further. Consider exploring this theme more deeply and providing more context for the reader.

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I see AI is having trouble again...its real problem is in expecting every line equal to the one above. That is not what Free Verse is about. I think you have expressed yourself well. I like the flow and rhythm of your thoughts. my favorite lines are:

You been to
Hell so many times
They might as well
Give you a passport

*thanks for posting this, Cat

Writers of today, tend to start each line with a capital,
something that makes punctuation difficult, especially endline punctuation.
you start out with the above mentioned every line caps, and then in the latter part of your piece, you switch to all lower case lines.
My take on this is that you should go with the mixture of upper and lower starts and better endline pucntuation. That would make this a lot more readable.

I get the feeling that you have experienced a period where you have not felt that you have lived up to your full potential as a poet. Now, you have seen that you have progressed and argue [to yourself], that you are better than you thought.
[I think so too].

~ Geez.
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