Hooded Stranger

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Wind violently screams and unsettles the calm
Invisible force powered by a façade of brutality
He steps away from his dream back into reality

Hail thrashes from the sky onto the frozen road
Ocean of grey erodes against the wall of security
He drifts into the void towards unknown futurity

Hooded stranger
Man with no name
Cloaked outsider
Man with no face

Shadowed stranger
Man with no name
Disguised rider
Man with no face

Lightning streaks and illuminates the empty sky
Electric currents tear apart the Heavens vitality
He moves into the storm and disappears silently

Snow rapidly falls and settles across the land
Blanket of white fuelled by a blizzard of impurity
He wanders into the night and fades into obscurity

No name, no face
Hooded
Then gone
Erased

No name, no face
Cloaked
Then gone
No trace

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Potential song lyric for a concept album regarding solitude and being alone by choice - HS

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West England, GBR

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath (poet), Caitlin Mattison/Eddy Styx (poet 'candlewitch'), Enda Collins (poet 'ziggy'), Martin Gore (lyricist for Depeche Mode), Neil Tennant (lyricist for Pet Shop Boys), Stefan Großmann (lyricist for Absurd Minds), Lemmy Kilmister (lyricist for Motörhead), Nathan Reiner (lyricist for Third Realm), Wayne Hussey (lyricist for The Mission), Leonard Cohen (lyricist), Tom Shear (lyricist for Assemblage 23), Clint Carney (lyricist for System Syn & Fake), Ronan Harris (lyricist for VNV Nation), Aaron Lewis (lyricist for Staind), Jason Charles Miller (lyricist for Godhead), Torben Wendt (lyricist for Diorama), Adrian Hates (lyricist for Diary Of Dreams)

Comments

lou

14 years 2 months ago

Dan

I love this one, it has a consistent rhythm, and l enjoyed the theme. I like the idea of being individual, and living under the radar.

I really like the imagery, fav verses are,

Wind violently screams and unsettles the calm
Invisible force powered by a façade of brutality
He steps away from his dream back into reality

And

Lightning streaks and illuminates the empty sky
Electric currents tear apart the Heavens vitality
He moves into the storm and disappears silently

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Lou

Lou,

it is written to be a lyric so I was careful with the consistent rhythm. Glad you liked the theme...I needed a character and just worked with my pen-name. Seemed to work, hopefully not in a too egotistic way!

Thanks for reading and commenting,

regards,

lou

14 years 2 months ago

Dan

This one gives off a feeling of wanting to be away from things in life that cause pain, and to be free to be who we really are. That's a feeling I experience often.

Lou

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Lou

Lou,

for me it is a persistent craving to be away...and I don't know what pushes those emotions for me.

Oh well, at least I am not the only one...you can join my band of freaks! LOL!

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Rosina

Rosina,

my pen-name has always been HS and I guess I want to be like him...so it is part a true account of me and combined with the fantasy of Hooded Stranger.

I find it difficult to separate the real me from HS, maybe I am becoming more like him. I crave solitude, and force myself to live out in the open, but my desire is to be alone...that may sound sad, but I can't deny my feelings.

Thanks for reading and commenting,

regards,

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Hey!

Hooded Stranger is copyrighted...hands off, get your own name!...LOL!

magics02

14 years 2 months ago

Hood

This is a raw work but one that dispels your myth and character. I like how you incorporated YOU in this write/ song. Mystical I call it.. That is you, a man with the name that dosen't play the game.

Blessings to you friend
Mona

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Mona

Mona,

I don't try to play any game...I always turn left when the sign says turn right...I like to be different, even it that separates me from the "norm".

Raw...yes it is raw and painful to when I read it back to myself.

Thanks for dropping by,

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 2 months ago

Dan,

I like the way you use the hail in the beginning for his entrance and then he leave a blank of snow in the end as he leaves. The coldness in his heart for the world is expressed so well. I love the crack of lighting as if opening a door for him to disappear through. For me these two stanza's are so indicative of who the protagonist is and his self imposed loneliness:

"Lightning streaks and illuminates the empty sky
Electric currents tear apart the Heavens vitality
He moves into the storm and disappears silently

Snow rapidly falls and settles across the land
Blanket of white fuelled by a blizzard of impurity
He wanders into the night and fades into obscurity"

Very well done indeed, one of my favorites of yours!
BRAVO!!
Eddie

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Eddie

Eddie,

good to see you on my page my friend.

You've pretty much covered the stanza's as they were intended to be read.

When I first wrote it I only had the chorus line...I then took the dog for a walk in the wind and rain and I wrote the rest in my head and had to rush home to write it down!

Glad you like it, I think I am convinced it is a good lyric to record now - cheers mate,

Candlewitch

14 years 2 months ago

Dear Dan,

Snow rapidly falls and settles across the land
Blanket of white fuelled by a blizzard of impurity
He wanders into the night and fades into obscurity

No name, no face
Hooded
Then gone
Erased

No name, no face
Cloaked
Then gone
No trace

I can completly relate to this piece, you do it justice. Thanks for another little peek into your soul.

Always, Cat

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Cat

Cat,

many thanks for reading and commenting...I am hoping to use this in a small concept album about solitude and being alone. I am pleased with this one and believe it may be ready for the recording process now.

Be sure to check out:

http://new.neopoet.com/node/observer-hs-inspired-dan

Eddie wrote a poem about my lyric but from his perspective - he did a damn fine job!

regards,

Candlewitch

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Dan,

I just came back to read your excellent work again!

love, Cat

Candlewitch

14 years 2 months ago

Hey Dan,

I just read eddie's poem. Great work!

love, Cat

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Cat

Cat,

Eddie did good didn't he?

Glad you read it, and also glad you read my again!! LOL!

regards,

Nichole

13 years 12 months ago

Excelent!!

I really really enjoyed this write. Though i hope you do not feel this way in real life.
I like the dark side of it, has mystery.

Nichole

Hooded Stranger

13 years 12 months ago

Nichole

Nichole,

I crave solitude. So yes this the way i feel most of the time.

I am writing an album of songs based on solitude from an individuals viewpoint. The daily anguish of having to be with people, and do things that i don't want to do, just to be considered one of the crowd.

Glad you enjoyed it,

regards,