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Dec 11, 2012
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Pain
My inner darkness
The glass of the soul
Falling catches no sunlight
Dropping onto black marble
Shattering without sound
Without a sparkle,
Or thrown light.
Never let this be me.
I scream inwardly
No one hears my agony
I touched the darkness
With my whole being
It is a product of a hurt
I have been given to hold
Held so that I cannot breathe
Reflected within myself.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I am fine, I just write sometimes, Yours Ian.T
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Race_9togo
12 years 7 months ago
Hi Ian
I have no critique, just appreciation.
Every time I read this I find myself at some new aspect of pain, and it's disquieting, how succinctly you capture it.
Ian.T
12 years 7 months ago
Jim
Great to see you visiting, and your comments are much appreciated.
I jot things on notebook and leave them for a while I sorted this
yesterday, Have so much work to do but never seem to get around to it.
At the moment am looking out some of the ones I don't usually write, Thanks again, Yours Ian.T
Rula
12 years 7 months ago
The relief
is that I know you don't have such grief but you
captured it as if real.
It touches !!
Ian.T
12 years 7 months ago
Rula
Thank you and good that you notice that it isn't me that hurts.
There are many that do hurt so, and it is to say I know.
Thank you for your write I hope that in understanding that it isn't you either.
Take care out there and enjoy life,
Yours as always, Ian.T