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Jan 23, 2023
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Paint Me A Picture
Paint me a picture
just any ol' view
Paint me a picture
you can make one or
make two
Paint me the sunset
name what you will
paint me a ride oh
what a thrill
Paint me a heart
for I have none you
see
Paint me some love
for you and for me.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
This is a pretty thing
Sort of bittersweet. It’s a little sad but you say it with tact and beauty. The painting metaphors are working because they’re simple and common to all readers.
Well done,
Tim
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
yes
how now I wish
I had been a painter
not a poet ...
to fulfill your wish
but still try I will
in poetry