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Aug 12, 2023
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The Painting
Shadows now stain the wall
where his precious painting
used to hang -
Sunrise
Spring
White Dogwood and
Bright Poppy Fields -
the feigned promise of love
he created for her on canvas.
He hung it on someone else's wall
by mid-autumn when withered leaves
insulted the welcome mat,
as the heavy sunset
scorched the frigid room
where vibrant colors
once lit the walls like flames,
brazen
sordid
pompous...
unfaithful.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ruby Lord
1 year 11 months ago
I enjoyed this, the
I enjoyed this, the alliteration and the images built the scenes perfectly. Great poem, linking the seasons to a relationship was very effective but the ending brings it together with a bang. Well done, loved it. Ruby :)
Lavender
1 year 11 months ago
Hello, Ruby,
The final line actually developed the rest of the poem. I'm glad to know that it seemed to work. I'm grateful for your help with this.
Thank you, Ruby,
Lx