Palestine, A Besieged Home

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively employs a variety of poetic devices such as alliteration, assonance, and imagery to create a vivid picture of the speaker's emotional state and the setting. The use of the archaic language, while adding a certain charm, can also be a barrier to comprehension for some readers. It might be beneficial to consider using more contemporary language to make the poem more accessible.

The poem's structure is consistent, adhering to a traditional sonnet form. However, it could benefit from a more explicit volta, or turn, which typically appears in the ninth line of a sonnet and introduces a shift in the poem's argument or perspective. This could add an additional layer of complexity and depth to the poem.

The theme of longing and loss is clearly conveyed, and the final couplet effectively summarizes the poem's central message. However, the poem could benefit from a more explicit exploration of the specific details of the setting and situation. This could help to ground the poem's abstract emotions in concrete images and experiences, thereby making the poem more engaging and relatable to the reader.

Lastly, the poem's rhythm and meter could be more consistent. While the poem generally adheres to an iambic pentameter, there are several lines that deviate from this pattern. Ensuring a consistent meter could enhance the poem's musicality and make it more pleasing to the ear.

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Dear Rula,
The sea, the shores, and every little shell..."
Your sonnet speaks of every heartbreak.
Much love to our dear brothers and sisters.
Lx

what does this word mean (waftures)? I could not find it in my online dictionary. Your poem is very sad... but it has beauty, too. I liked these lines:

Ephemeral the joy-evanescent.
The nemeses defeat in me the zeal.
Deprived, alike an orphan- mostly sent
a broken heart, I turn no chance to heal.

I have a question. How do you get another font?

hugs, Cat

I enjoyed the style and language use in your sonnet. It is most traditional. Sonnets are so seldom found here, I am compelled to comment on them, especially when well written.

Thomas