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Passenger Confessions - Friday

The driver inspects Elsie. ‘Your coat’s not right, love,’ he says.

She’s buttoned it up wrong. Elsie pulls the plastic handbag across her front to hide her faux pas.

The passengers who hear the driver either ignore her or offer tight, embarrassed smiles.

When she gets to a seat her arthritic fingers refasten the worn buttons. Not that the coat holds any warmth. It’s as thin as a shower curtain.

Momentarily embarrassed, Elsie is distracted by a young woman wearing high heels and a short skirt who takes the seat next to her.

‘You look nice,’ Elsie says, though what she really means is cheap.

‘I’m meeting someone. We found each other online. His name is Harrison. I hope he looks like Harrison Ford. I love his acting. Have you seen his films?’ Tracy says.

‘That’s exciting, you’re meeting someone new? Indiana Jones. Yes, he’s very good,’ Elsie says. But she’s already distracted by the man in front of her. He’s on his phone.

He has a brown envelope, unopened, in his hand. The contents obvious. Another bill.

‘Yes, as soon as I get paid. I didn’t know it would take this long. I promise, yes.’ He ends the call, and stares at the envelope. Anxiety bleeds from him, slow, sour, unstoppable.

Tracy applies her lipstick with the hunger of someone who needs to be needed.

‘That colour suits you,’ Elsie says.

‘Thanks, it cost a fortune. Chanel. Nearly fifty quid… I’m worth it,’ Tracy says, trying to convince herself.

Elsie imagines sitting at home alone this weekend. Her cat, Cooking Fat, the only source of heat… While her husband’s ghost speaks. Just turn the bloody heating on if you’re cold.

It’s all right for you, John. I bet you’re nice and warm where you are. Wherever that is.

Elsie stares out of the window, despising the comfort she takes in answering a ghost.

Tracy sprays perfume liberally on herself and floods the bus with a sweet cloying tang.

‘Your perfume smells expensive. Chanel again?’ Elsie says.

Tracy gets up to leave. ‘Nice speaking with you,’ she says.

‘Have a good time, hope it goes well,’ says Elsie.

Tracy totters to the front of the bus. Her skirt riding higher with each step and her doubts racing faster than a pedigree Whippet.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

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Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Margaret Atwood is one of my favourite writers. Carol Ann Duffy, Philip Larkin, Ted Hughes, Wendy Cope and more.

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Rula

Rula

1 month 4 weeks ago

Hello Ruby

Enjoyable as always. I admire the series. I just wonder if you meant it to  read as prose poetry?

Anyways, an interesting look into things that we might think of as usual daily scenes. Each detail is obviously thought of very well indeed.

Nicely done.

Thank you for sharing!

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

1 month 3 weeks ago

Hi Rula, you're probably…

Hi Rula, you're probably right about calling it prose poetry, thank you. 

I'm glad you picked up on the details, separate yet together in the same setting. 

Thank you for reading, always good to get a comment from you. Ruby :)

Lavender

Lavender

1 month 4 weeks ago

Passenger Confessions - Friday

Hello, Ruby,

What a fantastic idea - a series of observational poems. I enjoyed the raw human interaction. There's something simple, yet very deep within the details of the poem. 

I'll try to catch up on the rest of the series.

Thank you!

L

Back again after catching up previous poems:

Diving deeper into Elsie's life and dipping into the lives of those she interacts with during the course of the day, especially on her daily bus ride.  She's a widow, a loner, and a woman reaching out to others for conversation and company.  Her observations of those around her, and their human experiences really hold the reader.

Saturday...

Thank you, Ruby!

L

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

1 month 3 weeks ago

Hi Lavender, thank you for…

Hi Lavender, thank you for reading and commenting. Observational poetry, I think that fits well but I also wanted it to be sort of every day sketches and yet, these are not every day happenings but social issues we are aware of through media, artistry and poetry. Ruby :)