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Passenger Confessions - Monday

The driver wears his weekend, bloated soured face.
A woman holds the exact change, leaning back to escape his stinking breath.
Rain makes every passenger smell. A life lived in a damp wardrobe, mildewed.
A child wails on its mother’s knee, relentless.
Tired faces turn, irritation evident.

A crumpled old man smiles, memory creases his puckered mouth,
to kiss a woman he once knew, he folds his hands into his lap.
The woman next to him mutters from lips, web thin.
She knows him, knows his thoughts, hates his memories.
She wants him punished, humiliated, like she was,
years ago, the vicar, the shame.
He fidgets.

A youth turns his earphones up to drown out the crying child,
nods at the screeching brat with a sneer.
Everyone hears his tinny tunes.
Brakes squeal. The bus hisses to a halt. Passengers jolt forward,
a groan, a scream, the child still howling.

Rain hits the windows, oncoming traffic shimmers,
drowned figures stutter across the road, avoiding puddles.
The congregation moves like cattle
crossing the flood, torrential.

This enclosure has filthy windows, stretched necks
trying to see where they get off.
The driver ignores each departing passenger.
His shift will finish, eventually. And his passengers?
The end of the line, until tomorrow.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I've been working on a few poetic themes over the past couple of months and somehow managed to come up with a bus journey and its passengers through the week. Here's Monday's as it is Monday :)

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Margaret Atwood is one of my favourite writers. Carol Ann Duffy, Philip Larkin, Ted Hughes, Wendy Cope and more.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 months ago

Dear Ruby,

I promise to return to your poem later, when I can give it my full attention! ;)

very fondly, Cat

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 months ago

Monday....

Reminds me of a song by Fleetwood Mac! Mondays seem so dreary, I think. Everyone is dreading going back to school and work.The Mamas and Papas also had a hit song on the theme. Declaring: Monday monday...can't trust that day...

and the secrets of shame and betrayal are hidden, but live on as an under current

Your poem tells a good story of monday blues! I enjoyed your creation.

very fondly, Cat xxx

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

2 months ago

Hi Cat, thank you for…

Hi Cat, thank you for reading and commenting. I hope you enjoy the next instalment. But I'm not so sure it works now I've seen it on here? We'll see. Take care, Ruby xx

Lavender

Lavender

1 month 2 weeks ago

Monday...

Hello, Ruby,

Not only is it Monday, but it's a rainy Monday on a steamy, filthy, smelly bus.  The first line sets a good tone - introducing the bus driver who, it seems to me, drowned his sorrows and his entire weekend away.  Lots going on in the minds of these passengers - a lot of secrets and disappointments from the past.

Creative concept! I'll move along to Tuesday!

Thank you!

L