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Jul 20, 2021
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Passionate Inferno (Explicit Content)
As I lay beside you
The bonfire in my chest kindled
As our fingers brush and our palms meet
The blaze grew stronger
As our limbs entangled
Our faces draw closer
When our lips introduce themselves
The flames expanded
Our tongues meet and our desire grows
With my touch stroking your thigh
I could feel the ardor radiating from your skin
While I stroke your cheek
A fiery night full of passion arises
And the inferno consumes my heart.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Midge
4 years 2 months ago
Grammar!
Surely the 1st line should read "lie" not "lay"? The rest of the poem is ALL in the present tense so the 1st line should also be in the present tense.