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Geremia
Geremia
Sep 03, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

PATCHWORK QUILT--second update

PATCHWORK QUILT

colors fading
into grey
edges frayed
and stitches torn
to undone
no use to anyone
pieces old and worn
good to clean up.
metamorphsis into rag
then to ashes
then to dust.

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weirdelf

weirdelf

12 years 10 months ago

Nice revisions

This struck me in an unexpected way. I still think of myself mentally as about 20, but old and frayed as I am, I can still keep someone warm.

You bastard! You made me confront my own physical aging. A perfect allegory.

Geremia

Geremia

12 years 10 months ago

How good are you at math ? I

How good are you at math ? I was born October 19, 1942, You're just a kid, buddy-boy. :)

P.S. I still don't like the ending of the poem.

Joe

P.S. P.S. That is a recent photo, ya'll .Damn if I don't beat all !

ya'll is southern American for "you all."

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 10 months ago

Joe

Maybe that is the only thing old people can do no matter how frayed they are they still have the ability to keep someone warm in both physical and in thoughts,
Yours Ian.T
PS:- one small typo Warn instead of Worn Line 5
And I liked the piece being a little older than Jess at 25 LOL

S

scribbler

12 years 10 months ago

hi Joe

We old frayed folks are the most comfortable to snuggle up with. Now if I can just remember Why snuggling is good.................................lol.............stan

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 10 months ago

Stan

I tore my old dictionary up when I got to the "F" word so whats this Snuggle thing ???? Yours Ian.E