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Dec 07, 2024
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Paths to healing
There are many paths to healing,
And I will discover them all.
For each of my thoughts,
For every doubt in my mind,
For every moment of darkness,
They are there for me to walk on.
The type of path
Will be easy for me to manage.
And each step I take on it
Is bringing me closer to peace,
And to stillness.
These paths are clear
And free of obstacles,
With none of the burdens
Which have been weighing me down.
My movements on these paths
Will be graceful
And very sensual,
With all my six senses heigthened.
The path will be lit brightly
With dazzling lights
For the eye to behold.
My way is clear
Right here
Right now.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I am new to this, but I am not offended with wonderfully useful advice from those poets who have been writing for far longer than I have.Rip away with your criticism. It will only improve me.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
neopoet
7 months 1 week ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Paths to healing" effectively conveys a sense of hope and determination in the journey towards healing. The imagery of various paths, each tailored to address different struggles and doubts, is powerful and relatable. The idea of clear, obstacle-free paths leading to peace and stillness is comforting and inspiring.
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure or rhythm of the poem to create more impact and flow. This could involve experimenting with line breaks, stanza lengths, or incorporating poetic devices like alliteration or assonance to enhance the musicality of the piece. Additionally, delving deeper into sensory descriptions could further immerse the reader in the experience of walking these healing paths.
Overall, the poem effectively captures the theme of resilience and self-discovery on the journey towards healing. Expanding on the poetic techniques and sensory imagery could enrich the reader's experience and emotional connection to the piece.
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Lavender
7 months ago
Paths to Healing
Hello, Gogetter,
Welcome to Neopoet.
Inspiring and honest. Compelling language. No ripping away at this time.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you!
Lavender
The Gogetter
7 months ago
Thank you for the response
I find poetry a good way of ripping off the bandage. This poem is personal for me in many respects in that I have found myself on a journey of healing and it is much better for me to express my deeper thoughts in that format so that I can get it out on the page and out of my system. I hope to add some happy stuff too. I am not always like that.
Lavender
7 months ago
Paths to Healing
Duplicate. So sorry!
L