Seren

Aug 24, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Peace

Kneeling

as the curtains of time
slipped to drift
in the river of days,
my eyes sighed tears
and my heart
cupped to capture
its communion

praying

as the folds of hours
enveloped and draped
to pool, over hands
in humilities hold,
as each whisper
travelled mere moments
to awaken a Star

unknowingly

my words
had filigreed to glimmer
in milli seconds of wonder,
and the Sapphire dome
now shimmers to mirror
a future enthralled

at peace

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Comments

Roscoe Lane

12 years 10 months ago

If only,

If only it was that easy to capture some peace in this world of trouble. Beautiful well written poem. Regards Roscoe..

Seren

12 years 10 months ago

I really believe that our

I really believe that our world will not find peace until we can all be at peace in ourselves thanks for the read its much appreciated

regards JC

Ian.T

12 years 10 months ago

Seren

A beautifully penned piece of writing, it sounds as if you have found something precious to the mind..
Lovely to see you there, what a welcome sight,
Yours Ian.T

Seren

12 years 10 months ago

ello my friend

thanks for the read and the kind words
this one is still in need of much work
hope your both well

love always JC

Seren

12 years 10 months ago

Thanks for the read and

Thanks for the read and review its lovely to see you still around will get round and have a good read of some poems tonight ... hope your both well

hugs JC

weirdelf

12 years 10 months ago

It's a terrible poem

What's happened to you? Your best work was superb.

No, sorry, it's not terrible. I just expect better of you. This feels like you are "trying to be poetic". I can't give more constructive feedback than that right now.

Seren

12 years 10 months ago

it is an old poem rewritten

it is an old poem rewritten its still growing and changing at the moment
I am going over my poems and editting them ....
good to see you ,,,

cheers JC