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Sep 18, 2018
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Peace
From my window woefully, I did see
All the world that passed by me
I did not invite the devils in
I did not commit the cardinal sin
Yet I drown in a lake of sand
As I seek one innocent hand
I carved my epitaph in rock and stone
The word “Peace”, that alone
I tried to live a life of contentment
While the gods in their resentment
Fortified in malice and greed
Leaving me in anguish and need
Of that which I was promised
And which I never received.
© 2018 Robert J Tucker Ph D
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Style/Type: Structured: Western
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Eumolpus
6 years 9 months ago
a nice poem
unlike a work of yours I commented on the other day, this to me is a poem, and a good one.
I am totally on board with you concerning our so-called gods. Good words too. window woefully...
good intro.
This is a site that encourages sharing. I have seen only few comments from you concerning other poet's poems. Please get engaged and share your views! The more you share the more people will share with you.
Thanks
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Shadowdancer3349
6 years 9 months ago
Dr.
beautiful use of rhyme and the English language it flows right along
scribbler
6 years 9 months ago
Hello
Nice rhymes and pretty good flow. Message was even clear and a good one also. I assume the break in rhyme is intentional in last two lines...........stan
lovedly
6 years 9 months ago
Good Dr
of poetry I suppose
It was a pleasure to read about
Peace
I also have posted
We may exchange our view
if it pleases you
gregwa8
6 years 9 months ago
"yet I drown in a lake of
"yet I drown in a lake of sand, as I seek one innocent hand." powerful.