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scribbler
May 30, 2017 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

"PERFUME"

On the clean night air
blowing through my open doors
the whiff of sewer

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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S

scribbler

8 years 1 month ago

LOL

I just figured you were wanting me to close the door before you smelled it too lol.....stan

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 1 month ago

to compare fragrance.. scribbler's version is like endurance

whiff of sewer.......lovely
In the East it's free
all savour it
and
don't know
it's that bad
is it?

endure ...whiff of sewer..................
then smell and enjoy
fragrances of
roses
lilies
lotus
and
jasmine for sure
you will only then know
what stinks much more
ask the
Mayors
to come forth

not to live all the time indoors
sewers need them more
smell mor
what
whiff of sewer
of course

S

scribbler

8 years 1 month ago

hi loved

I just figure everybody would be expecting me to say something pleasant so I killed 2 birds. I gave the twist which Haiku needs plus a bit of humor. Thanks for the visit.......stan