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Jan 11, 2011
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Photographer
Just give me an aperture
and a shutter speed too
with a bright viewfinder
and a good lens or two.
I’ll take some pictures
in fact quite a few
I will almost certainly
take a picture of you.
But not just anyhow
I like to take my time
It has to be a bit special
a moment frozen in time.
I like to make a picture
something special you see
Not just any old thing, but
a photograph made by me.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
14 years 6 months ago
Being a photographer...
myself, I really identified with this one. The rhythm of this one is just a little bit rough around the edges, but I think if you say it out loud to yourself, and use some of the words you are trying to avoid, you will find that it flows a bit more smoothly. I know that photograph sounds more elegant, but the word picture makes the flow better. A good poem about the feeling behind most photographer's motive for taking a picture. ~ Geezer
Timbo
14 years 6 months ago
hi
Hi Geezer,
Many thanks for your helpful and encouraging comments,
take care,
Tim