Piling up

hopelessness; yes, one of my moments of madness

thanks for reading

If it engages you then I feel the poem is successful

thank you

It is good to see you again, thank you for the read
and for liking the write.

No bowels, ouch !

Most of the time I too feel just right, like all is well or
as well as it should be ... but every once in a while,
there is this and that ehhh

thanks

Thanks for the read and the critique, I never did like the way
that line ended, but felt there was something needed at the same
time ... I'll try the word "relieves", but it's not written in stone, I'm
still able to type (lol)

thanks again

Richard

I think so too, or at least a form of it ...

thanks Anna

Thanks for stopping in and so glad you liked it
and offered suggestions for it. The comma's you've
suggested change the meaning somewhat, changing
the word "look" from a noun to an action verb, which
isn't what I want to portray ... it is an I'm-drunk-look that
is being described, perhaps the hyphens are needed there.

thanks and thank you for making me think about the punctuation,
it is always good to know why we've chosen a certain way to go and
the best way to know is to be asked or given alternatives ...

thanks again

Richard

I always smile if you are around, I know there will be an
honest and thorough critique no matter who's poem you're
on. You wouldn't believe how many describing words that
"twinge" has been and not one of them was "squeeze" ...
which I loved. I rarely ever use an exact word that someone
suggests, but this time I'm just gonna steal it from you!

thank you for being here Pam

Hey, I'm old and living on the edge of the seat (lol)

thanks man

I think we all feel used up sometimes, thanks
for commenting Lonnie, glad you liked it.

Richard