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Apr 15, 2013
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Pillowed Dreams
while some
are ambitious
with dreams
to achieve,
I have mine pillowed
though I often could
hear them murmuring
"believe"
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Josephus
12 years 3 months ago
A beautifully succinct poem
A beautifully succinct poem but not lacking in imagery for all its brevity.
Joe
Josephus
12 years 3 months ago
A beautifully succinct poem
A beautifully succinct poem but not lacking in imagery for all its brevity.
Joe
Rula
12 years 2 months ago
hi joe
Sorry for the belated reply.
Very much appreciate the comment. Thank you
wesley snow
12 years 3 months ago
Beau's right.
Although the "English language is as the English speaking people speak it" (or write it ), technically "got" is not a word. There is never a reason to use it unless a character is speaking in a dialect that would use it. "Have" will always suffice.
Sweet poem Rula.
Rula
12 years 3 months ago
Thanks sir
English-excuse me- is a bit weird language, don't you think so?
Any learner would think that a word is a word as long as it is listed in the dictionary and is heard of the TV .
Ah! I learn something new everyday and the road is still long.:)
Thanks for the visit.
wesley snow
12 years 3 months ago
English.
"I" before "e" except after "c".... weird.
Rula
12 years 3 months ago
at least
this is a rule we learned a while ago
Ian.T
12 years 3 months ago
Rula
As with Beau this is a very good piece..
When at school, in English, they would always say that, got, get and the plurals of the same, were weed words, and should be avoided as their English is not good..
I await others to confirm this as it was a long time ago, lol,
Yours Ian.T
Rula
12 years 3 months ago
Thanks all
For reading and for the helpful thoughts.I've edited accordingly
loved
12 years 3 months ago
stick to your gun
let others have fun
Rula
12 years 2 months ago
hi loved
Always appreciate your comment.thank you dear
nokros
12 years 2 months ago
You don't
pen like a rookie - impressive lines.
Rula
12 years 2 months ago
hi nokros
And many thanks for your lovely comment