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Blue-eyed Bolla
Blue-eyed Bolla
Mar 12, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Piss-Poor Poet

I’ll conjure up, create, compose
a poem, which to you, I s’pose
sounds easy, like a piece of piss:
put pen to paper, make ‘em kiss!

How hard - you ask - is writing rhyme.
It takes no talent, only time,
you’d think! Though don’t dismiss desire,
and muse, who forges in the fire

sweet inspiration stripped of glitz:
not wasted on self-centred shits!
but wordsmith wizards wielding wands,
rogue rhymesters, free from bookish bonds.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: a poet proud, with poise and pose, who pisses on pathetic prose.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Buxton, Derbyshire., GBR

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

4 months 1 week ago

I had...

a vision of a painting I saw somewhere a long time ago, [can't remember where]
but there was a boy of about 6-7 years, lying on his stomach, with an open book, in a patch of sunshine coming through a window in big library. There were phantom elves, fairies and magicians swirling about the boy's head, and he seemed to be totally lost in that world of wonder. That was the image brought to me. I thought there was a hiccup with that second verse, but realize that it's just a misplaced line, where you had edited or something and the line just got offset. Fix it.

Title is good, language ditto. love the theme, with the emphasis on a smart pace.
I associated the first lines with the rest and felt the theme build well.
Nice job! ~ Geez.
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